New paper

Micro-ethnography (writting)
-subculture/people

Ethno people
graph wrtting
interview/observation/artifacts

revising a research paper 366 to 367

1. I have done plenty of research by you can always have more sources, and information to use in your paper. I think if i were to get more research it would be about the effects of childhood obesity.
2. I do not need to re order my paper
3. I think the way i present my points is in a logical format
4. I may be lacking in my trasitional paragraphs. I probably will make someone read my open sentences and see if i need to change or enhance anything.
5. I think i integraded my information i found very smoothly but i would always revice it more and see if i could do it better.
6. I have not put any visuals into my paper
7. I may need to have my quotes blended alittle better in my paper.
8. I have carefully avoided plagiarism in my paper, but i will revice is more to see if i missed any senetences that needed paraphrased.
9. I have analyzed and interpreted the ideas of other.
10. Yes i believe my ideas focus directly on my discussion with obesity.

Pg. 407 exercise 45.1

Oral history is an important way of capturing certain aspects of the past that might otherwise be lost (Freedman 30).While history books relate the stories of great men and great events (Gregg 174), rarely do they include the experiences of ordinary people- slaves, concentration camp survivors, and the illiterate, for example (Freedman 30).By providing information about the people and emotions of the past, oral history makes sense of the present and gives a glimpse of the likely future (Gregg 174).But because any particular rendition of a life history relies heavily on personal memory, great care must be taken to evaluate and explain the context of an oral history (Honig 139).Like any other historical account, oral history is just one of the many possible versions of an individual’s past (Honig 139).

Work cited
Freedman, Jean R. "Never Underestimate the Power of a Bus: My Journey to oral History." Oral Hisotry Review 29.2 [22002]: 30. Print.

Gregg, Alison, "Planning and Managing an Oral History Collection." Aplis 13.4 [2000]: 174. Print.

Honig, Emily. "Getting to the Source: Striking Lives: Oral History and the Politics of Memory." Journey of Women's History 9.1 [1997]: 139. Print.

exercise 45.1 407

Oral history is an important way of capturing certain aspects of the past that might otherwise be lost. Source 1.While history books relate the stories of great men and great events source 2, rarely do they include the experiences of ordinary people- slaves, concentration camp survivors, and the illiterate, for example. Source 1By providing information about the people and emotions of the past, oral history makes sense of the present and gives a glimpse of the likely future. Source 2 But because any particular rendition of a life history relies heavily on personal memory, great care must be taken to evaluate and explain the context of an oral history. Source 3
Like any other historical account, oral history is just on of the many possible versions of an individual’s past. Source 3

Parenthetical and work cited h/w

Victoria Janoski
October 21, 2009
ENGL 102-007
Parenthetical Notes and Work cited
Parenthetical Notes
1) The world’s most advanced bicycle was invented in 1977 by Swiss inventor Ugo Zwingli (Mayer 33).
2) When he first encountered Zwingli’s invention, cyclist Freddie Mercxx exclaimed: “This will either revolutionize road racing or set it back a hundred years!”(44).
3) According to Rupert Brindel, president of the International Bicycle Federation, “The cycling world was in a tizzy about the Swingli frame. Supporters called it ‘the bike of the future’ while detractors said it removed the sport from the sport of cycling.”(Qtd. in Zweiback 202).
4) Zwingli had discovered a revolutionary way to reinforce tissue paper. The result was a frame so lightweight that it would actually gain speed while coasting uphill (Mayer 36).
5) In his Memoirs, Zwingli wrote, “I was overjoyed by how strong the tissue-paper frame was. The first prototype held up well under every test-until the first rainstorm.”(63-64).
6) Zwingli’s bicycle was a mere curiosity until the following year, when he made this second brilliant discovery: waterproof tissue paper (“And Now” 416).
7) The twin brother of Freddie Mercxx, also a world-class cyclist, wrote:
With all other bicycles, the strongest and fittest cyclist wins the race. With the Zwingli bike, the lightest racer wins. I’m tired of being wiped off the track by skinny guys in tissue paper (O. Mercxx).
8) The fate of the Zwingli bicycle was sealed in 1985 when it was outlawed for competition by a vote of 70 to 3 of the International Bicycle Federation (Zweiback “IBF Disposes” 54).
9) Although the following week’s Tour de Finland race was marred by protests from newly unemployed lightweight riders, the cycling world soon returned to normal (LeMoon C17)



Work Cited

"And Now: Non-Absorbent T.P." Applied Chemistry Bulletin 1978: 416. Academic Search Premier. Web. 20 Oct 2009.
LeMoon, Greg. "Featherweight Furor in Finland." New York Times-News-Post 1980: C17. All Sports- News. Web. 20 Oct 2009.
Mayer's, Vilma. 101 Offbeat Ideas. Chicago: Phantom Company of Chicago, 1994. Print.
Mercxx, Freddie. "New Products." Cyclist's World Nov. 1978: 44-45. Print.
Mercxx, Otto. (28 January, 1980): Print
Zweiback, Melba. Two Wheels. Montrea: Singleday, 2000: Print
"IBF Disposes of Tissue Paper 10-Speed." Newsmonth Aug.1985: 54-56. HealthSource Consumer Addition. Web. 14 Oct 2009.
Zwingli, Ugo. Memoirs. Zurich: Zigurat Press, 1998: Print.

List of terms

Signal phrase- a verb introducing a sources words, includes, or insists, states. Signals that a souce is saying something.

Attribution phrase(identifying tag)- Involves name of source or context of source and signal phrase. Who plus verb.

parenthetical reference-

parenthetical documentation plus citations
-paraphrase
-quote
-summarize

revising sources

Berkowitz, Bobbie, and Marleyse, Borchard. "Advocating for the Prevention of Childhood Obesity: A Call to Action for Nursing." Online Journal of Issues in Nursing 14.1 (2009): 8. Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sep 2009.
Ebbeling, Cara B., , Pawlak, Dorota B., Ludwig, David S. "Childhood obesity: public-health crisis, common sense cure.." Lancet; 360.933 (2002): 473-483 . Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sep 2009.
Freedman, David S., , Khan, Laura Kettel, Dietz, William H., Berenson, Gerald S. "Relationship of Childhood Obesity to Coronary Heart Disease Risk Factors in Adulthood: The Bogalusa Heart Study.." Pediatrics 108.3 (2001): 712-719. Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sep 2009.
Jeffery, Robert W, Judy, Baxter, and Maureen, McGuire. "Are Fast Food Restaurants an Environmental Risk Factor for Obesity?." International Journal of Behavioral Nutrition & Physical Activity 3. (2006): 1-6. Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sept 2009

Kiess, W., A., Galler, A., Reich, G., Muller, and T., Kapellen."Clinical aspects of obesity in childhood and adolescence.." Obesity Reviews 2.1 (2001): 29-36. Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sep 2009.
Larsen, L., B., Mandleco, M., Williams, and M., Tiedeman."Childhood obesity: Prevention practices of nurse practitioners.." Journal of the American Academy of Nurse Practitioners 18.2 (2006): 70-79. Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sep 2009.
Must, A, and R S, Strauss. "Risks and consequences of childhood and adolescent obesity.." International Journal of Obesity & Related Metabolic Disorders 23. (1999): 2. Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sep 2009.
Parsons, T.J, C, Powers, S., Logan, and, C.D. Summerbell. "Childhood predictors of adult obesity: a systematic review." International Journal of Obesity & Related Metabolic Disorders 23. (1999): 1. Academic Search complete. Web. 29 Sept 2009.